Short fic

Mar. 31st, 2005 12:59 am
[identity profile] ryttu3k.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] mash_slash
MASH fic. Not long. Okay, pathetically short. Enjoy!

SEEING

Fandom: MASH
Pairing: B-eye!
Warnings: Minor slashiness, odd point of view.
Category: Ficlet
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I don't own them, this may or may not have happened. Hey, it's a cut scene. Title accidentally stolen from [livejournal.com profile] hawkeyesmartini. Oops. Just realised that...
Summary: Tom Straw can see, just not the way he wants to...

Tom Straw had been blind for three days and already he had learnt to rely on his other senses.

Newly sensitive ears picked up the screaming from across the compound. It came closer and closer, like a banshee from the stories he heard back at home, and he could swear it was about to pluck the life from him like it had his sight.

And then the screamer had entered post-op and he recognised the voice. It was Pierce, the wisecracking, cheerful surgeon who had treated, among others, the boy in the bed next to him. The one that had been sent home only a few hours before sunset.

What had happened to him?

And his stomach flip-flopped as he heard them discussing in hurried whispers (lucky for sharp ears) the optomistrist from the evac hospital, the one that had looked at his eyes and had not replied in words, and he could smell the nauseating stench of burnt flesh, and he knew that the doctor who had calmed down other patients with his sense of humour was now as blind as he was.

After a little while the others left - he could hear army boots on the floor. Pierce had stopped screaming a long time ago, but he could still hear soft whimpers of pain from across the room.

And then Tom could hear another voice - his own doctor, Hunnicutt. He liked Hunnicutt, who had told him to call him BJ and had told him about his little girl, Erin... and who had helped him write a letter and had told him that he was one of the lucky ones when he had started crying about being blind.

It seemed that Pierce liked Hunnicutt, too, because his whimpering had almost stopped completely, and if he strained he could just hear soft murmuring.

There was a harsh squeak and a rustle of sheets, and in his mind's eye Tom saw a tall doctor lying down next to his patient. He could almost picture the white bandages over Pierce's eyes, he had felt the same rough ones over his own before the optomitrist had arrived. He saw a hand reach up, brush over a pale face, wiping tears from beneath the bandage.

He didn't need to picture the next part - he could hear the unmistakable sound of a kiss, and calm, slow breaths as Pierce fell into an exhausted sleep.

In his mind's eye, Tom saw two human beings who shared something, and he didn't need vision to be able to see what it was.

Date: 2005-03-30 03:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] siggen1.livejournal.com
Aaaawww... That's soooooo sweet:):)

Date: 2005-03-30 04:20 pm (UTC)
subluxate: Sophia Bush leaning against a piano (Default)
From: [personal profile] subluxate
Aw, cute. The point of view was a great idea =)

Date: 2005-03-30 06:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] qzee.livejournal.com
very nice and I loved how you showed it to us through Tom, made for a unique perspective.

Date: 2005-03-30 10:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] canpin.livejournal.com
awww! it's adorable!

Date: 2005-03-30 11:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
What a lovely way to start a boring Thursday at work. I enjoyed the removed POV and the image of Hawkeye and BJ snuggling in one of those narrow beds. Thank you!

Date: 2005-03-31 04:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
Yes. But a drawn-out and entertaining challenge, requiring several volunteer helpers and a high-definition steadicam with a widescreen lens.

Not that I've given it any thought, of course. *cough*

Date: 2005-03-31 07:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
Copies of such an illegal invasion of privacy would be ... well, illegal. Of course I can make copies. Copies for everyone!

Date: 2005-03-31 07:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
Not in Italy! I'll upload a file to yousendit.com and keep it there FOREVER.

Date: 2005-03-31 07:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
You tell me, I'm only up to season 5. It'll become a major world religion!</strike

Date: 2005-03-31 11:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
Really? o.O You can get season six at JB Hifi in the city...

I know, but I'm broke so I'm in denial about that. Damn car registration. And we can get into slashy televangelism!

Egads, I just checked your profile - you like DAAS?? You wrote DAASfics up on Fabulae?

Shhh, don't share my dirty nasty seekrit past with the world! (Actually, I have a great deal of DAASfic that I never posted to fabulae. And a lot more that never survived the Great Fannish Plagues of the MOSH and DAASFic messageboards.)

You also like HP and Lord of the Rings? Right, you're friended.

Whee! This is becoming a Very Good Day.

Date: 2005-04-01 10:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
Wait for payday, more like. Roll on Friday! Come ye all and be HEALED!

Nothing wrong with it! I just haven't played there for a *very* long time - long story, unhappy ending, blah blah blah fishcakes. *g* And I used to be one of those stalker freaks at MOSH, but I grew out of it, thankfully.

Shall I send you stuff? I believe I might.

Date: 2005-04-02 11:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
Money is good. It buys you DVDs. Mmm, DVDs.

DVD is my religion. The first thing I would save in a house fire is my DVD player. Send $5! Send $5! Buy a hot dog!

Ahh, alrighty then... dare I ask what it was?

What happened wasn't terribly fandom-related; I was living with a fellow fan at the time and we had a falling-out that was unpleasant, and afterward I didn't want to hang out in the same virtual space as her anymore.

I realised something was suss when we were in Bondi Beach at the markets, the rest of the MOSHers sat down under a tree, got out binoculars and tried to look in Paul's window.

Yeah, that's the kind of freaky stalkerism I mean. Not proud of it (and I ALWAYS sat facing the beach, and omg get the hell away from me with the binoculars) but there you go. I was there.

Fic is coming. :)

Date: 2005-04-03 02:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronamay.livejournal.com
I'd save my videos. Cos DVDs can be replaced, but maaate, rare videos!!

I got rid of most of my videos, actually. I don't have much that can't be replaced. Household insurance is a wonderful thing. There are no sub- sub- sub- subliminal messages!

I was there for that once... I promptly crawled around to the other side of the tree and pretended I didn't know them. Sigh. I was fifteen, several were in their twenties, they should know better!

When was this, if I might ask? Because I'm talking about stuff that happened five years ago now... please tell me it wasn't still happening recently?!

Date: 2005-03-30 11:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hawkeyesmartini.livejournal.com
Awwwwwwwww. So sweet! (That's a perfect title, btw ^_^)

<:3D~

Date: 2005-03-31 05:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lyricalsoul.livejournal.com
Loved this! Great style you've got. And just... aw, so sweet. Just what I needed after a frustrating day at work.

Date: 2005-03-31 12:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stillwell.livejournal.com
Love this, especially the perspective *

Date: 2005-04-01 01:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] evila-elf.livejournal.com
Uniquely awesome! Great idea!
:D

Date: 2008-02-24 05:46 am (UTC)

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