i like the story a lot. the relationships, the descriptions, the characterizations are a lot of fun. i especially love that charles and klinger ended up together.
some of the grammar and sentance construction is awkward, it's not a big thing but fixing it might make the story that much sharper. (i'm sort of a grammar-nerd, so if you want me to go through it for the grammar, i'm happy to do it. no pressure, obviously, and it's great the way it is.)
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Date: 2005-06-14 03:29 am (UTC)some of the grammar and sentance construction is awkward, it's not a big thing but fixing it might make the story that much sharper.
(i'm sort of a grammar-nerd, so if you want me to go through it for the grammar, i'm happy to do it. no pressure, obviously, and it's great the way it is.)