I love this! The second-person makes it quite interesting, almost stream-of-consciousness; it's a difficult perspective to pull off, but it gives this story a meandering, thoughtful quality that works well for the subject.
And I adore the way you've portrayed Hawkeye and Trapper's friendship, too - so close, so dependent on one another, so easy-going and casually physical that they don't even realise what they look like to everybody else (and I have to say, that's one of the most plausible ways to blend the slash in with the canon portrayals I've seen in fic) - any other pairing and there'd be confusion and guilt, but when it's just Hawk and Trap, they don't think about each other, they just are. It's one reason I really like them, as friends and/or potential lovers, and this fic's got it down really well.
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Date: 2011-08-12 10:36 pm (UTC)And I adore the way you've portrayed Hawkeye and Trapper's friendship, too - so close, so dependent on one another, so easy-going and casually physical that they don't even realise what they look like to everybody else (and I have to say, that's one of the most plausible ways to blend the slash in with the canon portrayals I've seen in fic) - any other pairing and there'd be confusion and guilt, but when it's just Hawk and Trap, they don't think about each other, they just are. It's one reason I really like them, as friends and/or potential lovers, and this fic's got it down really well.