Drabble-esque: Never Ask, 13+

[majik-16.livejournal.com]

Title: Never Ask
Author: majik_16
Pairing: BJ/Hawkeye (implied), BJ/Peg
Rating: 13+
Warnings: Nothing scary here, I promise!
Disclaimer: Hah! If only...
Author's Notes: My first fic, figured I'd start short with a drabble. I've been reading a lot of BJ/Hawkeye fics, and I started wondering what Peg would think of it all, or if she'd even ask, or even want to know. Constructive criticism is appreciated!

She was still startled every time he kissed her, but she would never ask him to shave it off.

She would never ask him why he would not look at her when he made love to her.

She would never ask him why he cried on Christmas Eve.

She would never ask him (more than once) about his patients over there.

She would never ask him why he now sniffed his food before eating it.

She would never ask him why he flinched every time a car backfired.

And she would never ever ask him about the man who stole his heart from her.

Comments

[ladonnaerrante.livejournal.com]

Somehow I missed this post on my Flist--apologies that the community left you without any feedback for so long (it's not such an active comm.)

It's very powerful! I love the structure and repetition. And I think you did an excellent job of mingling the effect of the war on BJ and the true trauma he incurred with his love for Hawkeye--Tragic. And it's even more impressive that this is your first shot at fanfic, bravo/a!

[majik-16.livejournal.com]

Daw, thank you! I'm glad to see someone actually noticed this!

[twd_princess]

I am just now reading this because I just now found this community. I love this. And love it from Peg's point of view.