ext_51398 ([identity profile] lucythedragon.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] mash_slash2005-06-25 05:13 pm

Knots

I have a confession to make. I haven't written anything in over two years. *collective gasp!* In fact, I've barely been able to write more than a paragraph at a time, my neurosis over my writing have been that all-consuming. I don't know what it is about MASH, but it's brought me out of that slump. This is only the first of many plotbunnies it has given me. I just want to scream "I'm back" from my balcony, but my downstairs neighbor is crazy and would call the police on me. This is so exciting and nerve-racking at the same time. I hope ya'll like it.

Title: Knots
Author: [livejournal.com profile] ph34rthedrag0n
Pairing: BJ Hunnicutt/Hawkeye Pierce
Rating: PG
Summary: This is set after the seventh season episode "BJ Papa San". After losing something that helps curb his homesickness, BJ has to find something else to occupy that space.
Disclaimer: M*A*S*H was created, filmed, and acted out before I was even born. I take no credit whatsoever for any characters or situations, nor do I even begin to imagine profiting from this.
Thanks: [livejournal.com profile] tekiclutch for reading this over my shoulder, which I don't mind as much as I say I do, and [livejournal.com profile] hawkeyecat for beta-ing this for me and giving me feedback. You are awesome! Have some internet cookies!

Onward

[identity profile] bekkypk.livejournal.com 2005-06-26 12:40 am (UTC)(link)
Completely, Totally fantastic.
And thats from somebody who doesn't really like BJ :D
xx

[identity profile] bekkypk.livejournal.com 2005-06-26 01:21 pm (UTC)(link)
No, I just adore Trapper. :D
xx

[identity profile] teapot-yo.livejournal.com 2005-06-26 01:45 am (UTC)(link)
OH MY GODDDD this is gorgeous and right now i have to go to work (wtf I know it's ten at night) but I'll be back in a few hours to give you alllllll the praise you deserve.

[identity profile] hawkeyesmartini.livejournal.com 2005-06-26 02:23 am (UTC)(link)
This was awesome, just...amazing. I love how you wrote BJ; it seems that not a lot of people can get him right. Hawkeye you also did perfectly, and I loved his "yeahokay". And also - I LOVE YOUR ICON.

<:3D~

[identity profile] janecarnall.livejournal.com 2005-06-29 11:26 am (UTC)(link)
mostly he's a total bastard.

BJ is EVIL. I keep telling people this!
subluxate: Sophia Bush leaning against a piano (Default)

[personal profile] subluxate 2005-06-26 03:44 am (UTC)(link)
It was a pleasure to beta this for you. It's excellent. I'm available anytime for further beta-reading duties =) I keep rereading it and loving it more.

I meant to ask, d'you mind if I friend you?

[identity profile] hotspur18.livejournal.com 2005-06-26 09:15 am (UTC)(link)
Love it. And congratulations on writing again :-) I know what its like to have suh a long period when you can't do anything, and you have really come out of it in style!

Plus, y'know - 'tis B-eye *smiles* so am very happy to see this in my list...

Thank you for this. You made this setup truly believeable within its framework.

Can I happily assume that you will now be writing more? *looks hopeful*

[identity profile] pomkeygeekange.livejournal.com 2005-06-26 08:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow this was short and sweet and ace and all sorts of great!

[identity profile] pierceintyre.livejournal.com 2005-06-27 06:44 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow... okay, I have to admit, I'm not a huge fan of B-eye, but this was excellent. Hooray for writing again after two years!

[identity profile] lilmissfury.livejournal.com 2005-06-28 02:25 am (UTC)(link)
Great story, in fact really really great story. It's going to take me a night to mull this over and say what I really want to say, but tomorrow when I get back to work I'll put a real comment on it.

[identity profile] teapot-yo.livejournal.com 2005-06-28 02:33 am (UTC)(link)
Okaaay I'm sorry. I know I fail and I don't really have an excuse for not commenting on this sooner but really all I want to say (although I am obviously going to say more) is that this is gorgeous.

the filthy red robe he always wore spilled underneath him like a thing alive.

omggg what an awesome image, mostly because it's just incredibly vivid, but also because DUDE way to capture Hawkeye in a jar.

I’m sure they’ll make it without you … and because of you.”

ahhhhhh!

“Hawkeye - I’m having an affair.”



The smile on Hawkeye’s face froze. Then faded.



“You’re kidding.”



BJ didn’t even blink.



“You’re not kidding.” Hawkeye’s voice lowered to a whisper. “With who?”



“You.”


YES. YES TO EVERYTHING HERE. I mean GOD, Hawkeye's voice just rings out here, and I feel kind of like the fourth of July, a lot, actually, in that it's kind of like I've been waiting so long to see you actually write something, and now that I've seen it HOLY COW was that ever worth the wait. That's how fireworks are, you know? They're short and they go BANG and then they're done, and they're few and far between, but YOU BETTER BELIEVE people remember them because they are made from the most sparkly stuff on earth. LIKE YOUR FIC.

“But you know, if you get me pregnant you’ll have to tell your wife.”

AHAHAHA here I would like to reiterate that you can take as loooong as you want to write fic from now on. I mean wtf it took Jesus like thirty years to die and they're STILL talking about it. You got grip, fire, and guts, Jesus-style, only hot. And I tell you that is a combo!

Also I would like to pump up the volume and give "I... hah... you" an especial thumbs up, and even more than that I am here going to give a special shoutout to "yeahokay", because that is really just incredibly Hawkeye.

Uhh yeah I think that's it! Except really the only reason this isn't longer is because that's a tiny little fic, but that doesn't even matter! That's like, what? Probably a little over a thousand words, right? THAT IS A WHOLE HELL OF A LOT TO PACK INTO A THOUSAND WORDS. WELL DONE. :D

[identity profile] janecarnall.livejournal.com 2005-06-29 11:25 am (UTC)(link)
Oh god, that's hysterical. I love it.

“Hawkeye - I’m having an affair.”

The smile on Hawkeye’s face froze. Then faded.

“You’re kidding.”

BJ didn’t even blink.

“You’re not kidding.” Hawkeye’s voice lowered to a whisper. “With who?”

“You.”


Absolutely positively no doubt about it the BEST Hawkeye/BJ just pre-affair dialogue EVER. That's just wonderful.

[identity profile] dancinguniverse.livejournal.com 2005-06-29 03:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Awww, fantastic, sweetie. That was great. I loved the "yeahokay," bit too.

On a side note, I totally sympathize with the writing thing, because while it hasn't been as long for me, I was sorta out of the writing bug for a few months too, and all of a sudden Mash attacked me sometime last week, and rekindled my love and my writing. Gotta love it.

Great re-entry to writing. I fully approve.

[identity profile] la-reine-bleu.livejournal.com 2005-07-01 09:20 pm (UTC)(link)
Hotspur pointed me in this direction, and I'm very glad she did! Am semi-asleep and totally incoherent right now, but wanted to let you know I enjoyed this very much - adore your Beej!!!

Also love your icon *snickers* Can just *hear* it...

subluxate: Sophia Bush leaning against a piano (Wilson - facepalm)

[personal profile] subluxate 2006-04-29 01:39 am (UTC)(link)
Augh! Your link is dead! And this was a good fic, too. Any chance you could repost, and I can properly add it to the memories?