ext_72690 ([identity profile] murf1013.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] mash_slash2006-03-01 10:42 pm

X-Rated - Part 1 (M)

Title: X-Rated - Part 1
Author: Me
Pairing: None ... yet.
Rating: M
Disclaimer: Nope, don’t own anything. Don’t sue ... no money.
Archive: Anywhere, just let me know.
Feedback: Would be appreciated - good or bad
Summary: Hawkeye and Trapper get a new roommate ... Let the jocularity begin!

Warning: Somewhat AU and possibly OOC - please don’t read if you don’t like that kind of thing. I have tried very hard to keep them as IC as I possibly could, though. This fic was written with tongue in cheek and should be taken as such.

A/N: The following changes to canon have been adjusted specifically for the purposes of this fic:

1) Trapper is not discharged.
2) Frank...is.
3) Since Trapper is still with the 4077th, Hawkeye doesn’t go running off to catch him, and thus does not pick up BJ and bring him back to camp.


X-Rated - Part 1

[identity profile] janecarnall.livejournal.com 2006-03-04 09:09 am (UTC)(link)
My main objective was to get these three together. It was just supposed to be a funny fic.

Oh well. It falls over twice, I'm afraid: it's not a very good AU, and it's not a very funny story. :-( Really, writing a good AU is hard, and writing a funny story is likewise hard. Because, as Asimov famously said, you can aim at being informative and be a little bit informative, and you can aim at being entertaining and be a little bit entertaining, but when it comes to humour, you're either funny or you're not: it's a target that's all bullseye. If you miss the bullseye, you're not "a little bit funny", you're just not funny, and it's especially difficult in writing M*A*S*H when you haven't yet got any of the character's "voices" quite right yet. (Hawkeye nearest, but do correct the spelling of "cum" to "come".)

What I mean is: I think you were overly ambitious. You knew you couldn't write Trapper, and you half-knew you couldn't write BJ, and yet you aimed at writing an AU, which is a kind of fanfic that requires meticulous ability to render canon in areas of the show you're not changing.

Figure to yourself that the next story you write will be better. And avoid trying to write Trapper till you can get his "voice" right... :-)