>>2. Frank has his breakdown at the end of third season instead of the end of fifth season<<
>>The second change is big. Frank Burn's breakdown was choreographed over the whole of the fifth season, the final trigger when Margaret finally left: if he broke down earlier, why? What happened to him? Or to Margaret? You choose to focus so tightly on the Swamp denizens that we don't even know whether Blake or Potter is commanding the 4077th, but we need some kind of explanation why Frank left. Even if it's just a sentence or two.<<
This is actually something I thought about and struggled with...and still am struggling with. And actually, I do say that Potter is CO later in the fic. So, yes, I basically moved canon up about 2 seasons. I do realize that I have to address Frank and his crack up. Thank you for that.
>>I'm not going to actually quote you here...it would be too long :) But regarding BJ's feelings/guilt, etc.<<
That exact thing will be addressed later in the fic. I actually do have a direction there, believe it or not. It's just in the process of being written (and re-written!) and beta-ed. The same thing goes for the Hawkeye stuff...being concerned about BJ's reasonings, etc.
>>If you wanted to get Hawkeye and BJ into bed together, then either you need to work out why BJ is so unangsty about being unfaithful to Peg, or else you need to have angst. Hawkeye won't be angsty about it - why should he be? Only if he sees it's genuinely causing BJ pain is there any reason for Hawkeye to care at all, and you just haven't shown that BJ is in pain over his decision to have sex with Hawkeye.<<
Again, this is being addressed in a later part of the fic. I actually discussed this very thing with my betas while the whole ruckus was going on over the past few days.
>>If you just liked the idea of having Hawkeye and BJ and Trapper interacting, then you need to think up a plot (or borrow a fourth-season one) and show how it would work with the three of them there.<<
Unfortunately, the actual plot won't be known until the very end of the fic...sorry. It's kind of a twist.
Thank you so much for posting this!!! I really appreciate it. I've been waiting for it, actually :)
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>>2. Frank has his breakdown at the end of third season instead of the end of fifth season<<
>>The second change is big. Frank Burn's breakdown was choreographed over the whole of the fifth season, the final trigger when Margaret finally left: if he broke down earlier, why? What happened to him? Or to Margaret? You choose to focus so tightly on the Swamp denizens that we don't even know whether Blake or Potter is commanding the 4077th, but we need some kind of explanation why Frank left. Even if it's just a sentence or two.<<
This is actually something I thought about and struggled with...and still am struggling with. And actually, I do say that Potter is CO later in the fic. So, yes, I basically moved canon up about 2 seasons. I do realize that I have to address Frank and his crack up. Thank you for that.
>>I'm not going to actually quote you here...it would be too long :) But regarding BJ's feelings/guilt, etc.<<
That exact thing will be addressed later in the fic. I actually do have a direction there, believe it or not. It's just in the process of being written (and re-written!) and beta-ed. The same thing goes for the Hawkeye stuff...being concerned about BJ's reasonings, etc.
>>If you wanted to get Hawkeye and BJ into bed together, then either you need to work out why BJ is so unangsty about being unfaithful to Peg, or else you need to have angst. Hawkeye won't be angsty about it - why should he be? Only if he sees it's genuinely causing BJ pain is there any reason for Hawkeye to care at all, and you just haven't shown that BJ is in pain over his decision to have sex with Hawkeye.<<
Again, this is being addressed in a later part of the fic. I actually discussed this very thing with my betas while the whole ruckus was going on over the past few days.
>>If you just liked the idea of having Hawkeye and BJ and Trapper interacting, then you need to think up a plot (or borrow a fourth-season one) and show how it would work with the three of them there.<<
Unfortunately, the actual plot won't be known until the very end of the fic...sorry. It's kind of a twist.
Thank you so much for posting this!!! I really appreciate it. I've been waiting for it, actually :)