I know this is not a writer's group. I also was not asking for a beta. I do know that this is not a professional publication, and that we are not all professional writers here. I am sorry if you were expecting perfection; unfortunately, you won't find that with me. I've seen you give very harsh comments to other writers due to the lack of polish/perfection in their work, and that should have warned me that there is little sympathy to amateur work in this group.

In a chaptered story, not every chapter can be perfect. This chapter was not perfect but as I found it satisfactory to keep the story going, I posted it so I can continue with the story rather than dithering about with the chapter ad nauseum. This story is a work in progress, as I'm sure you realize.