Dear, I'm trying to find a polite way to say this... so bear with me.
I don't know if you realize it, but, your fanfic reeks. At least your M*A*S*H fanfic, I'm not sure about your other fanfics.
It's horribly OOC, the grammar and spelling mistakes are numerous, and sometimes it doesn't really make all that much sense.
I'm a slash fan, too, and your B-eye? Was scary. Very very scary. Not only was BJ some random person we've never met (because that wasn't the BJ from the show) but Hawkeye was a stranger too. And what was that "Maggie" business? When was Margaret ever called Maggie? And when was Colonel Potter referred to as "Sherm" by Hawkeye or BJ, ever?
When did Radar become taller than Margaret? When did Charles lose his eloquence? Since when has Hawkeye cried randomly at the smallest things and WHAT made you think that BJ could so easily leave his family? And Sidney? Oh, poor Sidney. What did you do to the calm, mild-mannered shrink? He doesn't yell or exclaim or flip out and I sincerely believe him yelling "WHOA?!?!" is out of the question.
Then, there was your Father Mulcahy fic with Gail. The basic plot was - Mulcahy angsts. Gail angsts. Mulcahy randomly leaves the priesthood and calls Gail. They have coffee. Mulcahy professes his love. They get married. They have a family. The end.
Seriously - what? Were you watching the same show I was? Mulcahy is so much a priest it's scary. Granted, I like Mulcahy fic, but Mulcahy fic won't work out happily. He's a priest who will always be a priest. It defines him. The man became part DEAF and he didn't leave the priesthood. He's not going to leave it randomly after two seconds of consideration.
Please, please, please, for the sake of M*A*S*H fans, watch the show more often, REALLY look at your fics, and get a beta. People will thank you for it, and ultimately, you'll become a better writer.
The purpose of this is not to flame you, since I do not know you personally and I wish you no personal ill. I'm just trying to let you know that despite what others may have told you, your fan fic is not very good. I've read worse, yes, but is that how you want your fics described?
Good luck, and I hope you do take this seriously and thus improve your writing skills.
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Dear, I'm trying to find a polite way to say this... so bear with me.
I don't know if you realize it, but, your fanfic reeks. At least your M*A*S*H fanfic, I'm not sure about your other fanfics.
It's horribly OOC, the grammar and spelling mistakes are numerous, and sometimes it doesn't really make all that much sense.
I'm a slash fan, too, and your B-eye? Was scary. Very very scary. Not only was BJ some random person we've never met (because that wasn't the BJ from the show) but Hawkeye was a stranger too. And what was that "Maggie" business? When was Margaret ever called Maggie? And when was Colonel Potter referred to as "Sherm" by Hawkeye or BJ, ever?
When did Radar become taller than Margaret? When did Charles lose his eloquence? Since when has Hawkeye cried randomly at the smallest things and WHAT made you think that BJ could so easily leave his family?
And Sidney? Oh, poor Sidney. What did you do to the calm, mild-mannered shrink? He doesn't yell or exclaim or flip out and I sincerely believe him yelling "WHOA?!?!" is out of the question.
Then, there was your Father Mulcahy fic with Gail. The basic plot was - Mulcahy angsts. Gail angsts. Mulcahy randomly leaves the priesthood and calls Gail. They have coffee. Mulcahy professes his love. They get married. They have a family. The end.
Seriously - what? Were you watching the same show I was? Mulcahy is so much a priest it's scary. Granted, I like Mulcahy fic, but Mulcahy fic won't work out happily. He's a priest who will always be a priest. It defines him. The man became part DEAF and he didn't leave the priesthood. He's not going to leave it randomly after two seconds of consideration.
Please, please, please, for the sake of M*A*S*H fans, watch the show more often, REALLY look at your fics, and get a beta. People will thank you for it, and ultimately, you'll become a better writer.
The purpose of this is not to flame you, since I do not know you personally and I wish you no personal ill. I'm just trying to let you know that despite what others may have told you, your fan fic is not very good. I've read worse, yes, but is that how you want your fics described?
Good luck, and I hope you do take this seriously and thus improve your writing skills.
Hmmm. I wonder if I'll get a response.